The Revelation, Your mic is horrendous, so right off the bat you won't be marketable since no one will like records with bad quality. Your flow is hella rushed in some cases, you need better word conservation to push that back on, instead of all jagged and lumpy. Sounds liek you need better headphones too because you come in real low-energy on tracks that are high energy, usually a sign of a limp and un-inspiring sound system. Your beat choices are pretty good, just that you don't mesh with them or match their mood, likely for the reasons above.

That's really all I can tell you for now man till you get your sound quality on point. 1

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