ok this could either be a rap or a nice spoken word piece.the vocab is good,as is the picture you try to bring accross.the flow is good and the way it is wrote makes it easy to flow through.i didnt too much like the end and think you could have pulled something off better or maybe even worded it diffrently.it wasnt nothing great but it was good and im a hard person to impress.i give it a 7/10

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