I didn't immediately get the first two stanzas. And i still don't fully get them now. But the last part i did. Who are we to blame? The system..and all those who conciesly and sub-consciesly 'work' it...

It was good. Though maybe a bit too on the abstract side. Too within itself. Little to no 'link' for the reader to get a hold of. To connect with.

Still, i understand this kind of piece. It's personal. And cos it's so cryptic and 'within itself', in a way, it becomes more personal than one which is eay to understand n all that...i've done many before. Though also cos i don't like to show too much personal and 'real' emotion as such...distance is what i'm getting at.

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