damn alot of emotions involved in on this song..i thought u meant audio song when u told me to peep but chorus could be better and longer and i cant knock the verse as a whole since your emotions were stirred tightly into this piece..but a little bit of advice..

any broad online shouldnt make this much of a difference to you ..trust me..not worth it..find a girl from school or in your neighborhood to write a song about ..write a song bout ya moms u know?? BUT one again it was decent.. rhyme fell off some parts but the content of it is what is most important and u displayed a character of sensitivity..