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Old 05-21-03, 06:52 PM   #3
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This was not bad at all. I don't know if you just typed this up real fast and didn't worry about typos or what. But it made it a little harder to read with the spelling mistakes in there. It didn't take away from the poem or anything..just saying.

>realiseing that from god him self ,to live life, is to be blessed//

That line was the one I liked the most. I think about that all the time. And I'm very thankful to have life.

>happiniess and joy use to be my distant best freind//
looks like me and them are bout to be reunited again//
hope they stick with me this time all the way till the end//

Those were the other lines I liked most out of it. This one started out with the bad things you've seen, stresses you've been through, then turned into talking about God, your girl, then how it looks like happiness is coming back to your life. I liked how it went from bad to good. Nice job. And about the grammar thing, ignore that, it's not a real big deal.
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