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New to RB
From: Somewhere over the rainbow... |
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IP:
I really really enjoyed your whole writing scheme and your structure. I enjoyed how it didn't rhyme I felt it gave it a more "natural" depth all of its own. I really loved how you would "start" each stanza with
"Push, Push!...
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!..."
Gave it a more intense emotion....written out beautifully. I could fully imagine this to be a spoken word with maybe a piano background...slowly playing blissfully amidst your voice...
You definately have alot of talent...and I would love to read more of your work...so please do us all a favor and continue posting your pieces...they are great <3 Take care and keep up posting...I look forward to more reads by you...
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