struvture kood be worked on , but not a bad drop at all, i will say that youo have elevated greatly compared to your past pieces....personally i hate ebonicz in poetry so tahts the only few thingz i didnt like, also a few linez were definitly streched....nice thoguh, keep elev8ing..................6 or 7/10

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*also try to have a better ending next time; to me, poems like this are better open ended