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Old 07-29-05, 08:00 PM   #54
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Originally Posted by .Barz Of Steel.
Dont be fooled by the name hoes

No worries bitches, we're still the best



"Acunamatata"

Leady:


the writtens im spittin are rippin you cunts
im a first place MC so chances of u winnin are second to none
im an un-beleivable wordsmith i came to wreck songs
and leave ya crews dispersin like my name was tephlon
but i aint fuckin wit dat bitch.. ill jus kick it wit yall
da kid wanted beef so i started bringin it R.A.W
no-ones weaker than him im beatin this bitch
you cud drop rhymes in brail.. i still aint feelin ya shit
but fuck this shit because yall know im the best
ill start killin you cats......... just to show im a vet
im ruthless n shit bring u n ya clique n its a tragedy
call me an amputee cos ill destroy yall single handidly
its animal cruelty wit wat im spittin on you cats
call me a train because im known to rip it on a track
but im done n thats it now yall know what the crack is
likes the bombings in london this shit is tragic

eh ok not feeling as much as I thought i would but it was an ok verse by you leady nice
Hook:

the next time your brain.. thinkin stupid shit...
its time to remind ya brain if you could spit.
cause remember I'm the same one who could rip..
you in a split second so choose it quick

hook is good, saw a good multie on t he last and first lines
Barz Of Steel:


I use pain to slay haters, aint nobodys name greater
Its like 'fat kids playin' Twister' the way Im the game breaker
I was made to hate fakers, so I come straight n juss nasty
Its like 'throwin' matches at Atari's' the way that I 'Pac heat'
Testin me's like 'sex with convicts'- itll get ya in trouble
Cuz I 'come through in the clutch', like drivin' stickshifts in tunnels
No need to trip or to stumble...cuz I also rock "automatics"
N rhyme so 'stupid dope' Im like retarded drug addicts
Its like pancakes ordered by fat kids-- Im bound to get stacks
My 'pocket's always full' Like QB's about to get sacked
Cant touch this text that I bring hard to disrespect with these mean bars
I 'prey on you fools' like ministers sexin with retards
Leave you left with obscene scars, Barz is rhymin the greatest
My words stay 'Sunnin' kats' like Phoenix signin' free agents
Each of my lines leave ya wasted, I cant help but demand respect
They only thought Jesus was perfect..cuz I hadnt set the standard yet

This was good I liked it nice structure flow good punches, good....see you know ya stuff about the world and the media...lol at the pheinox free agent line
Hook:

the next time your brain.. thinkin stupid shit...
its time to remind ya brain if you could spit.
cause remember I'm the same one who could rip..
you in a split second so choose it quick


Indeph:

oh shit! indeph on dude, its more then mic check one two.
cause I'm countin sheep,niggas here slept on you.
I got rest when I'm readin,they expectin I'm leavin.
but question:will they all get depressed when I'm breathin?
fuck them fuck you you too,damn right I mean you.
I got used to usin these hand mics,but you gotta read too.
enjoy my text,for now,but those annoyed of deph.
cause get tricked cause I got some decoys void for death.
the last time I was called wack,was way back then....
I dropped some wack shit.....................so it aint happen.
so next time your lips get loose,forget the rules.
forget the law.this the era of when shit get raw...
and the principals....I'm finished with dealin with these nincompoops.
fuck you I got shit to do.15 years of ad-mi-ration....
YOU ARE THE 1ST TO READ THIS FAR.. so congratulations!

looks like you didnt try didnt like it as much as I thought I would ya know
Hook:

the next time your brain.. thinkin stupid shit...
its time to remind ya brain if you could spit.
cause remember I'm the same one who could rip..
you in a split second so choose it quick


overall ok verse nice flow stuctrue keep it up hope to see more....

again rtf in Defying The Odds(link is in sig)
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