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IP:
Daubs your ish wasnt put together well at all it seemed very rushed and not well thought out at all.. anyways your vocab was okay but thats about all i can say.
Troop your verse wasnt really that solid, your whole thing was predictable and lacked
emotion and imagery ... well not so much lacked but wasnt really strong or complex... your rhyme scheme was alright but still beter then daubs. so you took it slightly
Blah vote troop
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