this is simple to me............


kon - i thought your verse had good structer ok rhyme scheme.....there wasnt much for vocab and story was realy just boring....its that gangsta talk shit i dont like it that much....sorry it justs gits on my nerves.....in text......but realy the story was pretty simple nothing good realy it was ordinary....but no hate

hnic - i thought your verse had ok structer....realy good energy and emotion.....and descriptive languge....which translates into good imagery....keep it up this was pretty good for your first outing.....you got that mind of a wrighter so just expand your story concepts a bit and you'll be coo.......

v/hnic

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