I disagree with both of you, the lines actually made it alot better, if the lines had been 'long' it would have ruined the flow, thus destroying the overall enjoyment of the piece, yet his lines were in place and made in impact. I seriously don't know who valor is on RB, but seriously, whoever you are, you don't know anything about poetry... you're concept of poetry is that of a ignorant fool. step your game up man.

Good looking write