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Old 03-16-04, 10:09 AM   #8
soul.
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IP:

you have an humorous style which is good, but your flow could be better

you should try using multi-syllable rhyming

ex.

your first bars ends with

get torched in seconds/

your second would be

im sick wit torture methods/
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