Jon- Eh, decent story. Nothing creative on the topic. Predictable. Basic rhymes, thought it lacked in imagery but you set the scenes and it stayed on topic.

Bob- Diff. approach, thought you tried to stay outside the box but poor wording didnt really bring out the potential this piece had. Better metaphors and similies could have helpd you alot. Topic is a pretty commonly shared emotion and thoughts.

Vote- Bob. He tried to be creative on the topic. Just fell short in technique and wording. But overall a bit more enjoyable topic.