Ok, I have come to notice that you are one to do dramatic, gory, sorrowful and gloomy pieces. Is there something down in your life or are you just that type of writer?

The vocabulary and imagery were very nice in this piece. Nothing to complex w/ the vocab and clean, defined, vivid mental pictures running through my mind all throughout the read. Your emotion was superb. Basically because this comes from the heart and its all about emotion problems. (cutting for ex) I think the only thing that would make your piece better would be a bit bigger and more colorful vocabulary. You had some nice words in there but for the most part just small words that help get the point across but not as strong as using other words.

Keep writing and working on improvments like that..

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