Aight, Os1ris, your flow was really hard to follow. The wording you did just kinda ruined the verse. It just didn't sound right. Structure was ok, but verse was hard to follow. Imagery was aight and so was the depth. Emotion was decent, work on your wording though.

HNIC, nothing really that great here. Emotion was ok, but you had no depth at all. Which I am assuming is because you rushed it. Your flow was ok, but I think you lost this on imagery and depth.

v- Os1ris

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