Ok regardless of you thinking its hate..... structure was alot better again.
Good flow but seemed extremely forced in places, Mom factor was nearly abused if not was.
Not too bad as it was keyed.keep it up your getting better.
Dont hate on advice dude, you wont be able to get better without peoples constructive critisim, they jus tell you haow to improve thats all alrite fella.
If you dont get there advice jus ask what they mean and then they will brake it down for you.