Gods Of War! -yeah im one
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this was some deep stuff brother.
I liked the use of words, was a very grown up and evolved peice. The message was clear and didnt stray throughout. The flow was ok and structure was a little stretched but i think that was deliberate.
I liked it, read it thru twice and thought it ended well.
The only thing that would improve it is the line size
7/10
well done keep it up
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