Thread: Believe?
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Old 06-30-08, 10:24 AM   #3
Lay.
don't try.
 
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Pretty decent piece Jay, it could had been a bit longer. It had some good imagery. The words were well chosen, vocab was on point. Flow was ok, you coulda threw in some multi's to make it flow better. But that was the only real flaw, but the rest of the piece made up for it. Props dude, keep writin
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