at the beginin u were on the beat nicely but u fell off, and didnt get back on for a while..
lyrics r hot, but try to shorten ure shit u stretching it alot.
beats cool
deliverys cool
mic presence iight
ure voice is wierd..do u have an accent? sounds like it..
anyways tracks decent, keep practicin and ull get better cause u def got potential.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=220500
RTF^^