I Am Unreal- Alright, this very much a good verse. You had a decent complexity in your verse. The vocabulary was good, but sometimes it ain't about vocab, the imaginary in your verse had me displaying pictures. Sense of emotion was there, not that much, but you've descriptive enough so I feel the character feelings. The grammar was decent, your concept was sub-par, very good. Conclusion, this was a nice verse, keep writing.

H.D.-This has already been done, I mean the concept, which I started to not liking about your verse. Ok you got vocab, using too much vocab if you ask me, but uh, nice descriptive imaginary words. Uh your emotion is there, not that much. I can't really say much cause it was overall played out. No hate here. I was feeling it, but its all about how you approach the topic and you came 'ok' but the creativity doesn't support it.

V/I am Unreal, and not just because he in my crew, because he came dope with his creativity and more interesting

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