This wasn't a bad battle .. maven had the edge with the content in his verse, he tried hard to grasp at making it deep but i didnt feel he pulled off the writers voice effectively enough here. It's like he wanted to give some real depth to his piece, and he came off decent but he didnt have that extra something needed to really bring it home. I think the length of it was its drawback actually, you didnt give yourself the room needfed to expand on it fully and capitalise, none the less, a good verse. I liked.
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.. smooth flow to this piece, rolled off the tongue nicely as i read it. Nice transition's used in this .. kept the pace nicely, good content
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but when you're 25, get real and settle down
talk of the pot calling the kettle brown
that's politically incorrect discussion though
save the five dollars and get a loveless ho
fuck child support, make em work and earn it
besides what's their eventual purpose?
revert to the changing past, misplace the facts
so we have a true reason to invade Iraq
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I only wanted to quote the first four, but the six were all connected and run into each other .. lol .. It was a nice match up, maven did well. He didnt have enough to take from stat's presence and writers voice here though.
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nice verse though Jax = )