do yourself a favor don't listen to these homos throwing around the word multi's and then going to bump some people like 50 Cent, BIG and ATCQ who have very simple rhyme schemes. Some of the retards who give feedback are so retarded i dont even bother. It would be a cool song and an even better poem said at an open mic. Point being this was NICE!!! Your good in your own way. Write about whatever you want if your write like this your cool. As far as something i could suggest this was a GREAT poem but I could never listen to that being rapped over a beat, sorry...I've listened to stuff like that rapped over a beat it was average. you gotta strive for beter than that. Next time listen to some of your favorite Hip Hop artists come together to form a lyrical monster and write like that.

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