first let me say... 3 laptecs dont mix.... for your first audio... YOUR part wasnt that bad.... quality is pretty much disgusting.... lyrics were coo. delivery not to good.... but i see you elevating pretty fast if you keep practicing.. 13th..... not to bad.... i mean to be new to audio i dont expect dzk or nuttin. so relatively speaking.... this wasnt a Horrible song... chrit.. um... keep at it...... you sound like a robot reading a ppaper...... to bland/monotone... gets people bored... put some variation in ya voice..........

ok drop. keep at it.....
note* - its a good practice to write your lyrics with the beat..... dont write them and try to find a beat to spit over.