wiley d you need to elevate a little bit more...you sound like me in 06. Hold on...I'll find a link later...
Try keeping all your verses around the same length, with an exception for the last line (optional) for when you deliver the punchline.

when i say mines was harder i aint talkin bout the way my dick feel,
bitches dont be in love they just be in lust with the way my dick feel

^This bar is what made the verse fall off, if you made it the same length as your first few verses it would sound me dope and flow better...this is called structure i'll edit your verse.



top fakin this shit real,
i spit ill ,
so i got a sick feel,
everybody wanna be hard like whats the big deal
eatin on the streets but i aint got a big deal
dead inside now i know how pac and big feel
ill smoke you so you can know how a cig feel
that means you get killed up in the ditch field
when i say mines was harder i aint talkin bout the way my dick feel,

This is just my opinion, I'm not sayin' you should switch styles straight off the bat, but just experiment with other peoples critism and see if it suits you, if not then keep trying until your dope mc.

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