Rhyming/Flow
Flow Was Dope Dawg, You Had A Silkily Smooth LIke Flow, With Good Internals, With A Good Rhymes Sheme Too...8/10

Vocab/Wordplay
Very Complexiated Vocab, Don't See Many "Newbs" With This Sort Of Vocab. You Had Great Phrases In Ever Bar, Bars Like:
" Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia
Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia"- Were Dope, Also:
"Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered
Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards" - Dope........8/10

Concept/Topic
You Had A Good IMage IN Your head About What This Should Be About. And I Think You Played This Topic Out Nicely, Spreading It OUt Throughout The 2 verses..8/10

Overall
8/10, Nice "Introductory" Verse, You have A Shit Load Of Potential Dawg, Your gonna Be A Legend At Rb In The Future, Keep Spittin'

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