very simple....i was kinda confuse about the first stanza where u were talkin to the reader then all of a sudden u switched ...well...it was kinda confusin but it was over all deep in a way that its from the heart ...but yeh i agree the ending couldve been better if u ended it with a quote or something that would summarize it all....

just keep doin ur thing...dont take my contructive crtitism personal but i like this piece but like i said it couldve been better...

keep droppin them verses...

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