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All this time i tried to be recongnized
i never thought bout being look upon in a smaller size
but it was everythin to me to be like them
i felt like da stuffed animal on the side with its eye off the sem
along the rode there were sum problems
but being recongnized i never minded who solved them
i craved the attention it was wat i fed off of
it was like a being a animal caged up like a dove
not being able to fully spread wings an be above
traped for over in feeding frenzy
after a lil while i relized the wouldnt defend me
i lost my friends for sumthan i dreamed
and whenever i tried to talk to them theyd walk away steamed
never thought it would ever happen
now im wishin that this power didnt fatten
^Good Verse Structure, Flow Was A Bit Off At Times..
Verse Didn't Seen To Have Alot Of Heart Put Into It..
Try Adding More Descriptive Instances And Words..
A Few Times The Verse Lost My Attention.. And I
Had To Restart, Try To Write A Story That Draws You In...
And The Whole Closer, Did Not Really Make Sense..
Favorite Bar: All this time i tried to be recongnized
i never thought bout being look upon in a smaller size
addiction to music, abuse it, penetrate the notes..
probing deeper with every voice, high as false hopes..
every song a homonym of a predecessing tune..
each lyric a shadow of doubt, still seemingly amune..
lighthearted anthems showing every penny spent..
tickling chords of progress, paying off more than rent..
setting blazes in the hearts of listeners, with dry ice..
soul missing in each fret, strung out in with every vice..
diversity in taste, regurgitating our bars of filth..
but there none the less, out of work, so we will..
work out every dime, landmines, riffing overtime..
can you read the sign? music and God are intertwined..
Let everyone see your words, read verses, bars, staffs..
try to buy back your soul? Guaranteed, Lucy just laughs..
don't pay for your wealth, enjoy it before Earth is too old..
For The Price Of Recognition Will Forever Be Your Soul..
Wow Man, Deep Verse, Flow Fell Off Also In This A Couple Times..
I Felt You Put More Heart And Feeling Into Yours Then U.Ben Did..
It Kept Me Captivated Throughout..
Favorite Bar : work out every dime, landmines, riffing overtime..
can you read the sign? music and God are intertwined..
^Just OverAll A Beautiful Work Of Art, Getting My Vote..
Vote: Understatement/ ..Jack Hanna..
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