um this was a close battle..........

DramaQueen - good verse overall....pretty good multies.....rhyme scheme coo......not alot vocab...but it migh have hurt if used any though....so I think it was good thing to keep it simple.....good structer too....good job overall



acuity - I think there was something awkward about your verse.....like sertain line were u shoulda kept it simple u put alotta vocab.....and lines were u needed it u didnt put anything that really showed enough importance.....but u had a coo rhyme scheme....structer was coo to....overall pretty good.....

but in the end my vote goes to.....................................


V/DQ

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