Mal- It seemed as if you just keyed that up, really didn't try...Was actually quite taken back by it, and not in a good way. It seemed as if you slipped into redundancy, kept saying the same thing...The vocabulary could have been a bit better, and the wording was a bit off...You did have a good take on the topic though...also, work on your form, it was hard for me to get into the piece. I honestly didn't enjoy it that much..

Ennui- I loved the symbolism in this peace...It started out great, really got me into the piece..Your writing style was pretty unique, i personally liked it..Your wording lacked a bit, but you made up for that with great usage of metaphors and vocabulary...Your take on the topic was great, though...I never really thought of going down a "River of Life"....A really enjoyable piece, will keep reading your stuff..

-V- Ennui