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IP:
Daaaaaym, Struggling With The Feed Huh???...
Its Tuff I Know, But On To Your Feedback...
I Was Really Feeling Your Verse...
Nice Steady Flow, Got Lost Now And Then But Overall On Point...
The Emotion In My Opinion Was The Best Part...
I Felt As Thought Taking Every Step With You...
The Concept Was Pretty Nice With The Different Views On Life...
That Concept Is Actually Alot Better For Collabs Though...
Just Because You Get COMPLETELY Different Views You Know???...
But It Showed Skill That You Could Do It Yourself...
Uuuuuum, Critizisms...
Add Some Hooks n Chorus's, Its Just Breaks It Up...
Makes It Easier For The Reader If They Get A Pause...
Fix Your Structure A Bit...
Your Lines Are Kinda All Different Legths...
If They're All Around The Same Then The Flow Is More Consistant...
And Another Thing Thats Kinda Minor But I Guess I Should Bring Up...
The "..." Actually In The Sentances Might Bother Some Readers...
Personally I Kinda Liked It Cuz It Made Your Style Sound Unique...
But Some Other People May Say It Makes The Read To Long Having To Pause...
I'd Wait And See If Anyone Else Dislikes That Before You Switch That Up Though...
Uuuuuuum Ya Thats It...
I DO Like Your Writing Though...
You Show Alot Of Potential For The Future...
I'll Be Keepin An Eye Out...
Stay Up And Keep Elevating...
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