Painful Times at Lawson High...


^^^nice chorus...but i got an ear for rhyme...so, i would have worded it "awful times" and "lawson high"...get it?

ne way...i feel like shit...so imma make this quick

see...rhyming is in my genes

damn...there's another one


ne way...


some of the rhyming seemed forced...including your diction...it's as if you were using words just to rhyme...try rhyming like that in complete sentences...

otherwise...this was creative...I like some of your multies...needed more concrete imagery (similies, metas)

vocab was extensive


I arose from the ashes of hate clashes to attend classes and spit acid and hit bastards...
Im a phoenix... so you could call me state capitol... I got the ears of the people... white, black and all...
Three X I'm under rated leavin' whole cities evacuated when I come on tour cuz I'm flat out nasty...


^^^ That caught my eye


Good Job dawg

7.5/10