Lethal Lunitic- Your verse was hard to finish reading... your rhyme scheme sucked... you tried to do multi's with words that just rhyme, but didn't make sense. your spelling mistakes didn't help anything and your verse didn't how any creativity at all.

Manipulation- The majority of your verse was straight.The ending came out of nowhere, and it was kinda weak. Your rhyme scheme was ok, kinda simple and to the point, but you had good imagery... really, you could've dropped anything and beat the verse Lunitic posted.

v/ Manipulation

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