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Old 08-26-05, 02:55 PM   #7
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You have a remote chance to win.. Cause EC your a slouch...
kid your losing control of this battle.. and its not between the couch
^^OK......but control lines like this are a lil blah nowaday..6/10
EC wants to go 10... but i'll be killing him in 2 bars for sure...
cause when i told E to think outside the box.. he started writing by the poor..
^^OK...but the set-up for this was gay...4/10
EC its a fact your ill.. but its nothing that cant be fixed by a lowely nurse..
and you were soo fucking stumped.. you had to uproot your whole verse..
^^good wordplay in punch..but work on set-ups...4/10
You dont get any feed on your stuff.. cause its clear no one gives a shit for E..
And you could get casted for star trek.. and not Cling-On to the Victory...
^^OK....6/10
Taking the UK by storm.. nah a little sprinkle doesnt count you lame.
Even on RV your a no name.. So its pretty obvious.. the EC will never reign..
^^Probably ur best bar in my opinion...7/10

OK..had some ite punches and shit.But you need to work on your set-ups.
Etiher the set-up be a punch itself or relate the punch.But don't just put some
shit there just cause it rhymes.Try to up your personals too.Too many general punches.


check....


in english litteracy grammer gets you all the answers,
aposprophe's only above our lines........................................,
...................................becuz his texts below our standards,
^^hmm..unoriginal..but personal nevertheless..6/10
i knew rv was full of homo's these people just get me vexed,
apos was in the elite 8..........................................,
.................................only coz he liked getting his willy wet*,
^^OK personal of his old name...7/10
verses are weak, people don't wanna read it, scrap ya lines,
coz you have to make them big, for it too catch their eye,
^^Ok again...6/10
see, willy likes to get rode, so he looks for tackle to grab,
obviously it's true......... coz he wins all the battles he has,
^^didn't like this one..3/10
let me exclaim ya ego(!).......... ill miss w(')rds and laugh,
coz this lesson in school questions(?) all the skills you have,**
^^Good...6/10

Ok..good punches n wordplay as well.But your verse had personals n shit.
Which was lackin in apos's verse in my opinion..

so my vote goes to Ec for harder hittin personals.

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