desperation for acception, dopes a disease and you dodged infection
healths in ditention, skins under tension, fat?...
.....................................u gain pounds like an old persons pention
first line was hot....jea i was feelin dat..second line was aiight....7/10
drop u like a bad habit, savage, don't want defeat bitch you have it
ur a 'joke', get out my hat u ain't a rabbit, hit twice as hard as daz had it
lmfao shit was aiight...first line was blah second line was a lil bit better 7/10
the man with the 'cures' who no-one adores, hard image on rap boards?
like a mid-wife im cuttin ya life chord, controllin death, the real life lord
jea the endin was a lil bit better then the rest....7.5/10

Overall jea this shit was koo naww meanz...i was feelin it....not your best in the league but it was koo...you had good multi's and vvocab..

21.5/30

hotshh:

Ravish and Starv.... Ya Savagely Spark Ya... Tragic Departure
Stabbing ya Heart Up....... Permanently like a Magical Marker
word this was dope for many reasons..1 because it had good vocab...second because the structure was good and wasnt stretched but you manage to add alot o fmulti's in there..and good wordplay and you had a simile in there 9/10
Replacing ya Face with thee Amazingist Grace Raising the Stakes
you Made a Mistake.. Want beef?.... ..Kon. Made You a Plate
word..this shit was pretty koo...goood set up and the second line was decent 7/10
At the End of the Day, they Tend to Say You Stupendously GAY
Suspend the Charades....Kid....We wouldnt be ya Friend for a Day!
word this was hot right here..i was feelin it 8/10
to tell the TRUTH you Lending Fiction, get Subtracted in Addition
Subjected to Demolition......... Premanition End Up Missing........
word htis shit was pretty dope 8/10

overall good structure thats what gave you the edge...and you wordeed things better
32/40

my vote: Hotshh!

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