--[Flow]---
Flow was similar to some fo my older pieces...so it's dope..lol....ha, seriously..you had some dope internals in here and some dope rhymes, complex and deep...none of this "fun & gun" shit, you know...dopeness.

--[Vocab]--
Vocab felt a little bit restricted..like it was burtsing to get out, but just never got the chance...however, this bar was dope:
"Some might call me Picasso with a pen instead of a paintbrush. .
I paint a picture of my expericences as my tears rush. ."...flow was dope there as well....

--[Concept]--
Think this is where you really peservered...you built up a image of your life, described it originally and personally as a rush of colour...ther way you contrasted the colours with feeling and emotions i felt was ferocious...
"Stir in some jade laced with a touch of gray. .
To symbolize everyday spent in envy and decay. ." - you had a good few bars liek that, really helped me visualise it....

The way that you ended it, i felt that it was like a picture of insantity..erm...darkness and cold maybe...

--[Overall]--
Certainly one of the better pieces done by one of the better writers...4/5..vocab was the only lacking attribute, however the imagry outshined...dope.

if you got time: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113884
-cheers.