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Old 05-09-07, 04:39 PM   #11
Lungz
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Haunted Houses Verse


keyin this shit up.. gimmick wack as hellllllllllllll

that asshole circle would make any fag go way hard..
datrus alrdy fuked up wit my pic..
now he done mistaked a fun house for a fuckin a gay bar..
LOL, I like this opener, comedic and a good opener
the house borin, abandoned and dried out..
shits sooo god damn fruity.. take a step and starburst come flyin out
The flow was too stretched at the end, would have been better if there wasn’t that problem, just decent..
if the house was a male.. no one would fuck his shit
no body be caught dead in there.. even the shadow's hidin under it!
This one is decent, not as funny or as good as opener
can it be more fuckin colorful, i mean enough iight?
shit is crazy.. blue, red, yellow n the pic was taken in fukin black and white
HAHAHAHA, this is a hott bar yo, good creativity..
ill slap this fun house alllll across the mantle..
cuz if it raises anymore red cross flags..
only visitors it'd get wuld be is folks willin to give blood samples
….eww? im not feeling this and the wording to the punch was horrible…
whoozah mofo


Hard Hitting Bars-2
Decent Bars-2
Bars Needing Improvement-1



Fun Houses Verse

Wow...quick key...

That house is ugly as fuck, so it's easy to slam this geek,
I mean black and white and old as fuck? It gave me relapse of the yo mamma week.
Naw…not even decent too me…
And that house is dirty as fuck, a memory of a nice time,
But now it brings a new definition to black on white crime.
Hahahaha, hott bar, nice creativity..
Pryce, you've got no support, I'll leave you knocked out,
The only thing that would root for you...is climbing up the side of that house
Hahaha, nice bar again hitting on the pic..
It might have been good looking at once, but now? shoot,
You even see the Windows busted worse than that vista lawsuit.
Dope ass bar, you coming hott, nice metta
And the color? It's garbage I'll bomb and have it lay done,
I mean look at that blacktop...it isn't even fit for kids to play on.
Naw…not feeling this bar again…weak closer


Hard Hitting Bars-3
Decent Bars-0
Bars Needing Improvement-2



Overall:


Best use of bars-Haunted house
Punches-Fun house
Mettas-Fun House
Flow-Haunted House
On Topicness-Tie


VoTe-Well honestly, this was another close battle I have witnessed this week. Fun house has a weak opener and closer, but complete fire in the middle. Whereas Haunted house had decent, hard and weak bars throughout his whole verse…But structuring aside, Fun house too more important category’s, so he gets the vote.
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