damn ate, this was sick! intense vocab and a crazy rhyme scheme, and the flow kept well. Whne it got to the last verse I wasn't sure of your topic anymore, and I think you had a bar talking about how you were off topic...well, it was ill none the less, good work, not that I expect any less from you.
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