Well like i said ima leave feed, for such a long piece you had a couple things wrong with it not too much that it was none enjoyable just viewing disturbing i wanted you to fix the font so comments like this wouldn't occur. I can usually tell by the length in someone's drop if the piece will be bullshit or not and it was a pretty decent drop, but most of ya lines sounded as if it was dragging shorten them, well ya syllable count anyway atleast because it just sounded off with your internal rhyming like words were missing or too many words were there ya feel me. The emotion and imagry was good tho nice storyline pretty well thoughtout structure was ok at best along with your vocabulary.

Fix da font, its really disturbing...props tho.

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