Thread: My first drop.
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Old 05-20-03, 02:09 AM   #1
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My first drop.

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Well, I figured it was about time I put something of my own on here instead of just commenting about other peoples stuff. I'm definately interested in getting better at writing so if you don't like this then tell me why and how I could get better. There's no point in telling me you don't like it if you can't help me improve. So here it is..


Sometimes I wonder what if
I jumped of the Empire State Building and plummeted to the ground
Ending my entire fate, killing me off, without a sound
The single thing that stops me
Is that my family might have to identify the body
While I'm walking to the after life in a slow pace
I could hear my family yelling "Don't go, please wait!"
Or what if I continue to wander aimlessly
Nothing to do, no where to go, time wasting dangerously
Can I face these decisions plagueing me?
What if I ask for guidance from Someone greater than me?
Will this guy in the mirror stop hating me
if I find a path to follow faithfully?
What if I let myself breakdown?
Sink to the bottomless pit where I can't tell top from bottom or up from down
In that place 3 demons continuously haunt me
Could have, Would have, and Should have
These are not the last, but unfortunately the best of my company
And what if I did what I was thinking
Got up, brushed these problems off, and stopped my soul from sinking?
The thinking light hasn't started blinking strong
So I'll just try to tread water a little while longer.

I hope this one can even be thought of as half as good as the stuff I been reading on here lately. I'm not real sure about how this one flows, though. Some of the lines are kind of long and some are short. But I dunno, you all tell me..
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