man nice really liked this one keep it up BQ u mad good at these like the structure and emotion u showed here too.....imagery isnt that good but aight jus work on that a lil bit more but everythin else is good liked the topic of course and the begining of it is the best there really enjoyed reading this keep it up BQ.....like ur topicals.......
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PLZ RTF WIT A VOTE IN MY TOPICAL BATTLES PLZ THNX U VERY MUCH IN ADVANCE...................

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