pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP:
really, really, short piece.... sorta ok i guess, but it would be a lot better if it was longer.... one of those times i was talking about, where the metaphors are too complex with too little explanation/revelation at the end of the piece..... make it longer next time playa, keep writin.....
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance
my poetry:
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