way to short... starting every single line off with the word "the" isnt a great thing.. repeating words has meaning if they are powerful leading words but "the" isnt one of them... it did tho have some meaning to it but it lacked a lot... 4 line poetry is hard to master... short poetry to me is a lot harder than long poetry because you need to sum up all of your feelings into those short little lines.... i think it has potential to spring forth into something bigger if you so choose to make it that way... so keep it up!