shenga.. didnt like the way you structured it,, didnt seem to set the punches up as good... ya had some decent wordplay, but the punches could have been more direct....
Bane.. didnt like the stretched lines either, but ya punches carried more weight, and the flow was smooth, with some decent wordplay....
overall bane jus takes it with more direct, harder punches..... but quite close... vote=bane