.K.onfliktz: vocab was tight, found good balance because it was understandable but not too basic.Structure was nice,made it easier to read. Here and there some internal rhyming which improved your flow, feeling that. The emotion was definately there,I like how you twisted it to the death-thing and the reaction of the mother was worded so good.Nice creativity,imagery was goodbut your best aspect was the emotion for sure...

d-cËpt!0n: you had an open ending which I love because it makes the readers think about what'll happen next.The vocab,flow and structure were straight to the point. Had some nice wordplay in it and the emotion was very good to in fact.

Bu these dreams, these desired dreams, do they come true
Or will I remain in the dark, waiting for the light to come through
^as I already said, I loved the ending...


Close battle but in the end my vote goes to .K.onfliktz because I felt he had the stronger emotion in his verse but both did a very good job though! No hate...keep at it!

DQ

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