This was a pretty good piece I'd say, tho I've seen a bunch of topicals with similar stories. Nice way to end, lots of detail to the piece which was good, and for the most part, the flow was on point with good multies. The only thing I think u coulda done better was use more "descriptive lines" over "story telling lines" For example:

And women get harmed, in this natural world of sinnin' & scorn,
All livin' is born from the pleasure & pain from limited porn.

OR

I tear the page, fuck what anyone finds to be appealin',
'Cuz money is power, so it's bad when you use your power to steal it

Those lines were nice. They tell the story without specifically saying whats going on or what the teenager is doing. Try writin' more like that for next time. Good shit tho, worth the read.