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I don't lose
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IP:
nice use of assonance in the first verse....track does good for emotion....hook should be layerd more....needs more warmth.....2nd verse works....nothing outstanding...but it works...3rd is a bit better then the 2nd.....
i have to balance in the middle of the other people n tony - this one was good not out the park, but with how good you have been i can see parts where this coulda been better....
good shit tho....great entrapment of an emotion....
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead
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