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This is my first post!
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Rate this line please
IP: 9CCA 14A2
I thought of it last night; I was too restless to sleep.
I watch the page as my hand moves erratically/ My smooth vocabulary enables me to write lyrics that you construe emphatically/ What do you think? |
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New to RV
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IP: 127E 43A1
1 bar? thats it? you gotta rite a little more than dat shit to get some feedbak cuz i cant really give u any cept you gotta work on keeping your lines the same size
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~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EEE3 C04A
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^^^yepper, pretty much what he said. in all honesty.....the bar is nice though. it shows that you got some writing potential. i liked your use of vocab and your multies were smooth. the only real pointer that i can shoot you off hand is that you need to work on your structure some. besides that, you did it. word. keep up the good work pimpin'. s.v., c.s.
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IP: 5B30 0354
Closed this isnt an open mic
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