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02-20-09, 08:32 PM | #1 | |||||||
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So, you've dabbled in cocaine, smoking cigarrettes and even need your weed...
And its funny how free you can be after a few hits of LSD... But you found yourself in a mess when, your life became gloom... And Now you have to answer all those questions that came to you on shrooms... But its your life, and you tell yourself this is not how its going to end... Untill that one "true friend" introduces you to heroin... Now, you take one little sniff, ingulfed in a bliss and this is your God send... but your stomach's in pits, here comes the vomit and you say "never again"... You see, ya friends become slaves for that which they pay for and you're glad you departed... Well, the pain hits your mental you begin romancing those chemicals now you're back where you started... Still, you say "its just pills" How is it relevant to the matter?... you have will power but your money is low and you go searching for the powder... Now shes got her revenge You go on a binge and without it you start to cringe... you get a pin, stick it in your skin and find the glamour in a syringe... wrapped up in sin you start to rob for the bucks... Just to get ya hands on that which has made you corrupt... you have no reason to live and no remorse for what you have done... Untill that one day you see the man you've become... So you try to kick it you try to fix it But withdrawal sets in... Now you're screaming in pain you've played her little game... Just another victem... cramps, diarreah, puke, cold chills, hot sweats "I cant sleep and it hurts"... You've never felt this bad a day on the earth... Now you flea to your peers for some positive feedback... But they look at you with disgust, and you go on to relapse... Now you pray every day for it to go away and ask God why you havent been saved... God says "you are below average, you took her in marriage, So you might as well take her to the grave..." http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=248896 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=248658 |
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02-20-09, 11:22 PM | #2 | ||||||||
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i liked alot of the lines, cuz the poem is very deep
and obviously i know what you'r goin through but Now you flea to your peers for some positive feedback... But they look at you with disgust, and you go on to relapse... line, was dope for real nice drop man, stay sober and keep spitting
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02-22-09, 01:41 AM | #3 | ||||
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that was good cuz.
RV is acctually starting to get up again. keep with what your doing because its talent
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02-22-09, 09:23 PM | #4 | |||||||
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Good drop dude, interesting take on the topic. I liked how you working all the drugs in and really captured what it's like when your getting off the hard shit. Keep droppin son. |
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03-01-09, 03:48 AM | #5 | |||||||
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this was good but it could be better.dont try to flow like rap so much.the purpose of poem if to able to write without guideline.certain line should be longer.try adding a few words to the shorter lines to touch it up.nice emotion here and vividness.overall good drop that just needs minor work.
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