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02-14-09, 04:49 PM | #1 | ||||
Jack The Ripper
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JTR - Irish Baby
IP: F540 07B2
newest track, 6th track i've ever recorded in my life... Verses, dubbing and chorus all done in one take, no mixing, fuck it.. feel this shit if you're Irish!!
Constructive criticism pleasee, i've only just started with this shit so lets get some good advice http://www.zshare.net/audio/556311173de20d09/# and this is just some semi-commercial shit this time, I always switch my style and flow up every song, so if you don't feel this type of track you might feel the next one Pc |
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03-09-09, 10:21 PM | #2 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 2BA6 1F0F
wow @ no feedback.
ok, ummm.. for starters I wasn't a big fan of the beat you used, that shit just sounds really boring. but to be fair, you did carry it well in the verses. the hook was gay as hell, seriously man. that shit was just so slow. I mean, how can I put it better. It seemed to drag.. like there was no "hook" to it for lack of a better term. it had no snap, no creative spark that made me think "ok, this is tight". the verses on the other hand were nice. you are pretty sick with the multies and shit, had some nice lyrics and shit that made me laugh. I especially enjoyed the little potshot at poetic, that shit made me laugh. second verse at the start.. to me it sounded like flow wise you sorta slipped off for a moment. like first verse was nice, second verse at the start you didn't sound as if you were with the beat for a second.. then after the jennifer lopez shit you got back on track and it was smooth from then on. I might be wrong, its just to me.. that is how it sounded. overall, for some starter shit it was nice. for someone who only just got to audio it was good and pretty much that is all I can say. its a better first song than most of the dudes on this site when they first got it popping. a few minor slip ups, but overall nice. for real though, get with some better beats.. none of that slow ass boring shit. god damn fool. next up, make a song about cooking. "I SAID I'M A DOPE CHEF, BABY!" |
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03-10-09, 12:33 AM | #3 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 0FA0 9C00
hook was o.k.beat sucks cock.flow is good.you have a nice flow and lyrics are good here also.not too into the topic either.its commercial in a sense but still underground.
LMFAO at the poetic diss lolol hahahahhahahhahahahahahhahahahahahahahhahaha overall good shit here just switch the beat a little and work on your emotion more..... return feedback on my shit
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03-10-09, 01:42 AM | #4 | ||||
Jack The Ripper
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IP: F540 07B2
fasho bro ill hit you back tomorrow, thanks for the feeback
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03-10-09, 06:19 AM | #5 | |||||||
I made it and il end it
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IP: 94E8 2E6C
Wow kinda mase sounding dont yeah think???
Mad multi's as usual, overall good drop...... Havent got time to give proper feedback right now, so il get at you later.... Beat is ok, but not great. |
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03-10-09, 02:38 PM | #6 | |||||||
10:23 till i'm 86
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IP: DD1C 59F7
you're joshin me
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