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Untraceable | 2 | 28.57% | |
final | 5 | 71.43% | |
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03-21-05, 08:59 PM | #1 | ||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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Voted For: final
Alright this was probably the best topical battle i have seen in a while so im going to break this one down extensively. Final: Good verse, you stayed on topic and stayed consistent the whole way through. Vocabulary: In some places it was great, In others it was nonexistant. I definately feel you could spend a little more time in this area. Emotion/Imagery: Two of the most important things in a topical battle, And you had them in your piece. The emotion was definately felt by the reader, you told a story which can sometimes be hard to do, so you intertwined imagery with the story, and it gave more impact. When someone can pull everything together it ends up a terrific piece. Wordplay,Structure,Multies,Consistency: Your wordplay i would have to say was pretty good, you made sure that the bars rhymed and some people fuck that up with big words, thinking the rhyme when they just sound alike so good job there. Structure was OK could have been better. Multies were perfect, not alot but there were a couple just like i do. Dont ever overflow a topical with multies it kills the feeling. As i said before you stayed consistent all the way through, stuck on topic. Good piece. Overall : 9.2/10 Untraceable: Vocabulary: You definately took this category, i mean just read the first 10 lines and look at all the vocab there that went good with the topic. Emotion/Imagery: This is where you went downhill as i stated before. These are the two most important aspects of a topical. And your imagery was sub par. And your emotion didnt satnd out like how i know you can make it. Wordplay,Structure,Multies,Consistency: Well your wordplay was practically perfect, but you did one thing that really made you lose this battle... And that is the over-use of multies. They are uneeded in a topical. I can understand a few multies but basically every other line is chocked full of them. It killed your flow, and the structure was by far better, and you were about tied with final in the creativity and consistency areas. Overall: 8.3/10 Vote: Final Great Battle Please return the favor with an honest vote on any battle in my sig. TY
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